Drabble – Mistake

Jim and Josie’s relationship had changed dramatically over the past few months. Jim had made one mistake which turned their life topsy-turvy, he was miserable as communication with his wife had become exceedingly painful. His friends had advised him to let go, but he didn’t have the strength, she was afterall his soulmate.

Today, on occasion of their wedding anniversary, Jim poured Sangria into two tall glasses while Josie stared blankly at him, he gulped down his drink, drowning his inner turmoil.

A pregnant silence ensued, the whirring sound of life support was the only proof of her being alive.



22 comments:

  1. A touching and sad story.Very well told.

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  2. Ohh this pierced my heart!

    Beautiful :)

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  3. This was so sad. It was very well written.

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  4. A very sad story well told. One minor point - I think the silence would have 'ensued'. :)

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  5. A very sad story, but told so well.

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  6. Too sad. A loyal husband. Good for him.

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  7. Oh, what a sad twist. Loved your story!! ♥

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  8. A well-written story with a sad twist at the end which explained everything. Very good.

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  9. Touching....sad! Beautifully written...

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  10. Dear Rajlakshmi,

    That was an unexpected ending that went straight for the heart. Very well done.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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  11. I so hope for a turn for the better... these things happens, and maybe a year from now, they will enjoy the drinks together.

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  12. Wow! I just read a couple of blog posts ... and the last sentence really makes you go ... well, wow! :)

    Really well written.

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  13. @silentlyheardonce
    thank you :) do visit again

    @Megz
    yeah re accident :)

    @RedHanded
    awww ... but glad since that was the intent :P

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  14. @Soumya
    thank you for dropping by :)

    @cshowers
    glad you liked it. Thank you :)

    @Sandra
    thank you for visiting

    @Lizy
    corrected. Thank you for pointing out :)

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  15. @Atreyee
    Thank you Atreyee :)

    @Glynis
    Welcome to my blog. Thank you :)

    @Patrick
    yeah a loyal husband... a strong bond. Thank you for visiting.

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  16. @Kathy
    thank you so much :)

    @PS Joshi
    Thank you for your comments. Glad you like it :)

    @Anjana
    @Ranu
    @Rochelle

    thank you so much for visiting :)

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  17. @Bjorn
    Loved your hopeful vision of their future :) Thank you for visiting.

    @Comic Husband
    Thank you so much :D Welcome to my blog.

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