Naisaiku: Daisies

crimson petals curled
as breeze showered memories
DAISIES ON YOUR GRAVE
as breeze showered memories
crimson petals curled

**written for The Naisaiku Challenge

12 comments:

  1. Hi, RajLakshmi, Wonderful sounds employed here,I can almost see the daisies, as if they're dancing on the grave, perhaps.

    Thanks for taking The NaiSaiKu Challenge?

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  2. This is quite sad, but the daisies dancing make it less so.

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  3. thats a spiral ring..!!
    ohhh

    heyyy that previous post really s a cool breeze in this not so differnt ro(s)tting pan here ...

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  4. @ All

    thanks everyone for the comments :)
    hey Gautami I have checked out your link.. its beautiful... :)

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  5. wowwwwwww realy beautyful :)

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  6. ..thank u for saying it so well ..

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  7. {ps:- " as breeze showered memories "

    if u choose to kindly reconsider the line as- a breeze showered memories /
    or - the breeze showers/(showered) memories _

    or simply ignore the uncalled for remarks on a tiny bit of grammar }

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  8. Thank you all :)
    and thanks Zoya... will reconsider it :)

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  9. Wow!! that's really evocative...really liked it!!BTW like the ramblings of a roasted soul..have reached that stage right now!

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  10. crimson petals curled
    as breeze showered memories
    DAISIES ON YOUR GRAVE..
    Awesome line perfectly matched.. each other.... very nice Rajlakshmi....keep it up !!!

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